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It
may be only 500 words, but the admissions essay portion
of a college application can mean the difference between
acceptance and rejection. How you write your personal
essay shows the admissions committee why you are different
from everybody else. It provides information about you
that test scores, grades, and extracurricular pursuits
just cannot. You can use the essay to describe a favorite
activity, to tell a story about yourself, or even a
story about your dog, but make sure to really use it
-- in a way that captures the reader's attention and
shows that you are exceptional.
Step
One: Brainstorming
You should expect to devote about one to two weeks simply
thinking up possible essay subjects. From this process
of brainstorming, you may find a topic you had not thought
of at first. Here are some questions to consider:
What
Are You Like?
o What is your strongest personality trait? Does any
attribute, quality, or skill distinguish you from everyone
else? How did you develop this attribute?
o How would your friends characterize you? What would
they write about if they were writing your admissions
essay for you?
o Consider your favorite books, movies, works of art,
etc. Have these influenced your life in a meaningful
way? Why are they your favorites?
o Have you experienced an exciting moment, as if your
eyes were opened to something to which you were previously
blind?
What
Have You Done?
o What are your major accomplishments and why do you
consider them accomplishments?
o What have you done outside of the classroom that demonstrates
qualities sought after by universities? Of these, which
means the most to you?
o Have you ever struggled mightily for something and
succeeded? What made you successful? Have you ever struggled
mightily for something and failed? How did you respond?
o What was the most difficult time in your life, and
why? How did your perspective on life change as a result
of the difficulty?
Where
Do You Want to Go?
o Of everything in the world, what would you most like
to be doing right now? Where would you most like to
be? Who, of everyone living and dead, would you most
like to be with?
o What are your dreams of the future? When you look
back on your life in thirty years, what would it take
for you to consider your life successful?
o How does this particular university fit into your
plans for the future? Why do you want to spend two to
six years of your life at a particular school?
Step
Two: Selecting an Essay Topic
As these thoughts start to solidify into an essay topic,
think about execution. What sounded like a good idea
might prove impossible in the writing. Most importantly,
think of how you can make the subject matter original.
Even seemingly boring essay topics can sound interesting
if creatively approached. With an essay question in
mind, think over the following questions:
o
Will your topic only repeat information listed elsewhere
on your application? If so, pick a new topic. Don't
mention GPAs or standardized test scores in your essay.
o Can you offer vivid supporting paragraphs to your
essay topic? If you cannot easily think of supporting
paragraphs with concrete examples, you should probably
choose a different essay topic.
o Will an admissions officer remember your topic after
a day of reading hundreds of essays? What will the officer
remember about your topic? What will the officer remember
about you? What will your lasting impression be?
Choose
a Story
The best essays tell a story about the applicant. The
essay does not have to be the story of your whole life,
but rather a small glimpse of it, one that is rich with
meaning and alive with imagery. It often helps to think
about the impact that past events have had on you. In
one admissions essay written by a student who was accepted
to Harvard, Princeton, Dartmouth, and Stanford, an ordinary
story is told in a unique and captivating way. In this
narrative about hiking up a mountain, the student also
conveys a deep appreciation for science, as well as
a dedication to the hard work required to fully understand
the universe:
Although
the first few miles of the hike up Mt. Madison did not
offer fantastic views, the vistas became spectacular
once I climbed above the tree line. Immediately, I sensed
that understanding the natural world parallels climbing
a mountain
. Much like every step while hiking
leads the hiker nearer the mountain peak, all knowledge
leads the scientist nearer total understanding.
Entitled
"Hiking to Understanding," this essay tells
the story of one hike, but at the same time, gives a
complete idea of the author's values, interests, and
philosophy. Thus the essay presents
run-of-the-mill subject matter in an out-of- the-ordinary
way.
Step
Three: Writing the Essay
You must bear in mind your two goals: to persuade the
admissions officer that you are extremely worthy of
admission and to make the admissions officer aware that
you are more than a GPA and a standardized score, that
you are a real-life, intriguing personality. But before
you can convince an admissions officer of this, you
must first grab his or her attention.
The
Introduction
Most admissions officers spend at most two minutes reading
your essay. With this reality in mind, spend the most
time on your introduction. One technique is to create
mystery or intrigue in this first paragraph. At the
very least, you should not give away the whole story
right at the beginning.
Give the admissions officer a reason to keep reading.
As an example, the first sentence of the "Hiking"
essay reads as follows:
Surrounded
by thousands of stars, complete silence, and spectacular
mountains, I stood atop New Hampshire's Presidential
Range awestruck by nature's beauty.
This
first sentence sets the mood for the essay, it draws
the reader into the scene, but it does not state the
author's argument or even the plot of the story to follow.
The reader has to continue
reading in order to learn what happens next.
The
Body
After the first paragraph has been perfected, you must
ensure that the body paragraphs relate to the introduction.
It helps to have a theme or phrase that runs throughout
the entire essay. In "Hiking to Understanding,"
the author uses the mountain as a unifying image:
Some
people during their lives climb many small hills. However,
to have the most accurate view of the world, I must
be dedicated to climbing the biggest mountains I can
find. Too often people simply hike across a flat valley
without ascending because they content themselves with
the scenery. The mountain showed me that I cannot content
myself with the scenery.
Also
notice that the author uses simple language. Many students
think that big words make good essays, but powerful
ideas are often best expressed in simple and elegant
prose.
Another
way to impress an admissions officer is by using specific
examples and evocative touches of imagery that stay
clear of cliché. The application essay lends
itself to imagery since the entire essay requires your
experiences as supporting details. Successful essays
stick to the mantra, "show, don't tell." Here's
one example from the "Hiking" essay: When
night fell upon the summit, I stared at the slowly appearing
stars until they completely filled the night sky. Despite
the windy conditions and below freezing temperatures,
I could not tear myself away.
This
passage shows how description of the stars and cold
can make us both imagine the scenery and understand
the author's point of view. It tells us what the author
feels and thinks, more so than if the author had spelled
it out for us.
Finishing
Up
The conclusion is your last chance to persuade the reader
or impress upon them your qualifications. Expand upon
the broader implications of your discussion. The "Hiking"
essay does this successfully, both expanding on the
description of the scene as well as on the scene's meaning
for the author:
When
observing Saturn's rising, the Milky Way Cloud, and
the Perseid meteor shower, I simultaneously felt a great
sense of insignificance and purpose. Obviously, earthly
concerns are insignificant to the rest of the universe.
However, I experienced the overriding need to understand
the origins and causes of these phenomena.
Don't
be surprised if the writing process takes many days.
Few writers can dash out a quality essay in just a few
sittings. It takes awhile to find the perfect structure,
wording, and imagery. If you have the time, spend a
week away from your draft; when you return to it, you
will read it with fresh eyes.
Written
by the Harvard-educated editors at EssayEdge.com. "Hiking
to Understanding" and 99 other sample essays are
available free on EssayEdge.com
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